“Ten reasons not to trust Alan Lewis”
By Morgan Mangham McNamara
INT. LIVING ROOM
Opening to a figure sitting in a chair holding a cup of hot
liquid. Text appears in the screen, introducing him as “Jason”. He turns to the
left and places the cup on a small side table. He turns back around and leans
to the right to grab a TV remote. He looking at the TV he turns it one by
pressing the red button on the remote. While keeping his eyes on the TV he
reaches for the cup on the table. He grabs at nothing, the table is empty. He
looks around and sees the cup in the hallway entrance. Jason groans and goes to
get it. He grabs the cup and freezes. Time is at a standstill. Jason’s chair is
pushed in front of him by someone unseen.
Time begins again and Jason unfreezes. He lifts up the cup and
turns around to see the chair blocking his path. Jason disgruntledly moves the
chair back to where it came from. Jason moves to the middle on the room.
Jason and time freezes once again. The previous unseen
person, introduced as Alan by the text appearing on the screen; appear out of
the hallway with a glass of water. Snickering and trying to hold in his
laughter, he places it neatly on Jason’s head. He is still laughing as he makes
his way to the chair. His laughter fades as he hides behind the chair. Time
unfreezes and Jason moves slightly causing the glass to tumble over his head,
spilling water. Jason screams in anguish. He stomps over to the large at the
edge of the room. He grabs a bat and returns to the centre of the room. He
swings it around wildly. Alan is seen with his hand over his mouth, laughing.
Jason freezes mid swing.
Alan emerges from the chair, holding a marker. He goes up to
Jason’s face and begins to draw a moustache. As he finishes it, time
unexpectedly restarts again. Jason’s bat swing, hits Alan and forces him
sideways. Alan lands on the floor and looks up at Jason. Jason lurches over him
holding the bat in a threatening fashion. Jason swings the bat at Alan’s face.
Alan rolls to the right and stands up. He and Jason run
around the room. Jason is swinging the bat around. He hits pictures off
shelves, smashes the cup and the table. Also knocking books out of the book
case. He manages to back Alan into the corner. Alan closes his eyes and
cringes.
Time freezes again. Alan opens his eyes and
stands up. Alan lets out a triumphant laugh. He points at Jason and unknowingly
accidently touches him with his finger. Jason begins to move again.
Alan runs to the other side of the room and jumps onto the
table. Jason freezes and unfreezes. Jason reappears as wearing a pink dress. A
confused Jason looks to Alan at his side and sees him laughing on the floor.
Jason’s bat disappears and reappears in Alan’s hands. Jason backs into the
corner, pleading. Alan swings the bat.
Screen goes black. A distinctive CRUNCH is heard.
Scene reopens
Jason opens his eyes.
He looks to where the bat landed its blow. The bat was put through the wall
beside him. Jason smiles and stands up beside Alan. He places his hands on his
hip admiring the destroyed room. Jason and Alan have a small discussion while
exiting the room about their had happened.
The screen fades black. A tall man in a suit and carrying a
suitcase enters the destroyed room. He looks up and falls to his knees. He
cries out and screams about Jason and Alan.
Hi Morgan, Your story is coming along nicely, with some good attempts at humour in the slapstick style. You need to formate this properly and pay a bit of attention to structure. I have sent you and email with the sample of the formatting.
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